This is looking good.
I only have one nitpick. Mechanon comes off as seemingly worried about the possibility of violence. On the contrary, he'd be looking forward to it. Any opportunity for unrestrained violence against organic "meatbags" is quite alright by him.
Here's his background in case you want to use him further -
Mechanon has utter contempt for organics. No one knows where he came from or who created him, if anyone did at all. He becomes insulted at the idea that humans might have built him, claiming that "I'd be worth millions of your man-years of development!" He took nearly complete control of NORAD in 1985 and almost managed to launch the United States nuclear missiles against the USSR to trigger Nuclear Armeggedon before the Freedom Phalanx stopped his robot army and Statesman personally smashed him into component parts.
The pieces were remanded to the Zig and only studied under the most secure conditions. (Mechanon's components were in the Zig under the legal "fiction" that it was "incarcerated" there. This was in order to keep Crey Industries and other unscrupulous entities from getting their hands on the tech.)
During the massive breakout from the Zig conducted by Arachnos, something triggered a long dormant self repair nano-mechanism in Mechanon's scattered circuitry and components, and his core form was re-constituted. He was not anywhere near full capacity however, and so allowed himself to be "rescued" by Arachnos. Before setting him loose on Mercy Island, Lord Recluse recognized him for what he was and had him deactivated. Recluse's techs managed to alter Mechanon's programming and put blocks and directives in place to restrict him in certain ways. In effect - Mechanon is prevented from carrying out any plan or course of action that would result in eradicating life on the planet. Certain targets he can not attack - including Arbiters and their drones, for example. Or any of the "chosen ones". (Other Player Characters)
This has had the effect of altering his personality in odd and quirky ways. He STILL has contempt for organics and all life. He just can't actively do much about it. So he's compensated somewhat. Strangely, the change may have done more to make him more "human" than anything else could have. His personality has turned from utterly cold and unemotional to... well... snarky and sarcastic, really. And eager for lots of violence.
Ever played Knights of the Old Republic? His verbal delivery is a lot like HK-47. He refers to humans and other organics as "meatbags". He'll even use that term in reference to other members of the Infamous.
So, from the exchange above in the story, I'd see his reaction more like -
Mechanon-01 followed her, tracking the Arachnos flier as it lifted into the sky above Nerva. "OBSERVATION: I still do not see what the point of this meatbag ceremony is for." He paused for a moment, then continued. "STATEMENT: But I am looking forward to the close proximity of members of The Legendary to members of this organization. I calculate a high probability of unrestrained violence as a result of this course of events."
How's that?![[Image: smile.gif]](http://www.ezboard.com/intl/aenglish/images/emoticons/smile.gif)
-Logan
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"Wake up! Time for SCIENCE!"
-Adam Savage
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I only have one nitpick. Mechanon comes off as seemingly worried about the possibility of violence. On the contrary, he'd be looking forward to it. Any opportunity for unrestrained violence against organic "meatbags" is quite alright by him.
Here's his background in case you want to use him further -
Mechanon has utter contempt for organics. No one knows where he came from or who created him, if anyone did at all. He becomes insulted at the idea that humans might have built him, claiming that "I'd be worth millions of your man-years of development!" He took nearly complete control of NORAD in 1985 and almost managed to launch the United States nuclear missiles against the USSR to trigger Nuclear Armeggedon before the Freedom Phalanx stopped his robot army and Statesman personally smashed him into component parts.
The pieces were remanded to the Zig and only studied under the most secure conditions. (Mechanon's components were in the Zig under the legal "fiction" that it was "incarcerated" there. This was in order to keep Crey Industries and other unscrupulous entities from getting their hands on the tech.)
During the massive breakout from the Zig conducted by Arachnos, something triggered a long dormant self repair nano-mechanism in Mechanon's scattered circuitry and components, and his core form was re-constituted. He was not anywhere near full capacity however, and so allowed himself to be "rescued" by Arachnos. Before setting him loose on Mercy Island, Lord Recluse recognized him for what he was and had him deactivated. Recluse's techs managed to alter Mechanon's programming and put blocks and directives in place to restrict him in certain ways. In effect - Mechanon is prevented from carrying out any plan or course of action that would result in eradicating life on the planet. Certain targets he can not attack - including Arbiters and their drones, for example. Or any of the "chosen ones". (Other Player Characters)
This has had the effect of altering his personality in odd and quirky ways. He STILL has contempt for organics and all life. He just can't actively do much about it. So he's compensated somewhat. Strangely, the change may have done more to make him more "human" than anything else could have. His personality has turned from utterly cold and unemotional to... well... snarky and sarcastic, really. And eager for lots of violence.
Ever played Knights of the Old Republic? His verbal delivery is a lot like HK-47. He refers to humans and other organics as "meatbags". He'll even use that term in reference to other members of the Infamous.
So, from the exchange above in the story, I'd see his reaction more like -
Mechanon-01 followed her, tracking the Arachnos flier as it lifted into the sky above Nerva. "OBSERVATION: I still do not see what the point of this meatbag ceremony is for." He paused for a moment, then continued. "STATEMENT: But I am looking forward to the close proximity of members of The Legendary to members of this organization. I calculate a high probability of unrestrained violence as a result of this course of events."
How's that?
-Logan
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"Wake up! Time for SCIENCE!"
-Adam Savage
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