YAY! Shizuru origin story!
Double YAY! Shizuru bar binge story!
Keep writing keep writing keep writing!
OK, hopefully the rest of this will be constructive.
1- How long has the wall been up? I'm guessing maybe an hour?
2- I'm also guessing they're in Croatoa? But since there is now a university campus in Steel (I think it's Steel), you may want to note where it takes place.
That's all I'm noticing right now.
-Cindy
Double YAY! Shizuru bar binge story!
Keep writing keep writing keep writing!
OK, hopefully the rest of this will be constructive.
1- How long has the wall been up? I'm guessing maybe an hour?
2- I'm also guessing they're in Croatoa? But since there is now a university campus in Steel (I think it's Steel), you may want to note where it takes place.
That's all I'm noticing right now.
-Cindy