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Tales of The Legendary: Emerald Blast
 
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Nicely done, Spud. You're spot on for Eva and Alistair, characterization-wise, so no worries there.

Council and their bots, I presume, for the bad guys?

My only quibble on a technical level is the sudden and unheralded change of POV from the doctor to Evangelia (and back, and back again) are abrupt and
momentarily confusing. More obvious transitions might make the switches a bit easier to take.
-- Bob
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Then the horns kicked in...
...and my shoes began to squeak.
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[No subject] - by Bob Schroeck - 04-20-2008, 05:29 AM
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