Getting around to comment on the stories I've missed in the past week or two.
As Spud said, the technical proficiency is well done. But it does feel a bit rushed, and confused.
This may be what you are going for, given that Sell-Sword is confused as well. And you manage to pull of a sense of history between the characters, given the short format.
But that sense of history does leave me wanting for more (as if that is a surprise)
-Terry
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"so listen up boy, or pornography starring your mother will be the second worst thing to happen to you today"
TF2: Spy
As Spud said, the technical proficiency is well done. But it does feel a bit rushed, and confused.
This may be what you are going for, given that Sell-Sword is confused as well. And you manage to pull of a sense of history between the characters, given the short format.
But that sense of history does leave me wanting for more (as if that is a surprise)
-Terry
-----
"so listen up boy, or pornography starring your mother will be the second worst thing to happen to you today"
TF2: Spy