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Neo City High - The PCU Days - Galaxy Falls
 
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"Because.....Galaxy City's statues......were memorials......to the dead......."

recomend are instead of were...

"All you had on when you came in was a torn up pair of pants. We had to trow them out."

recommend throw instead of trow

"Was an Aiko Hayataki or Aiko Kitikami admitted to the hospital. She's my wife. We were in Galaxy City together when....."

Question mark instead of period at the end of this first sentance

and this kidnapper is an IDIOT. I'd put my money on Nam, with sharkhead coming out of it as flattened afterwards as Galaxy is now!
Hear that thunder rolling till it seems to split the sky?
That's every ship in Grayson's Navy taking up the cry-

NO QUARTER!!!
-- "No Quarter", by Echo's Children
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Neo City High - The PCU Days - Galaxy Falls - by Ransan - 09-13-2011, 10:41 PM
[No subject] - by Ransan - 09-21-2011, 07:12 PM
[No subject] - by Star Ranger4 - 09-21-2011, 08:05 PM
[No subject] - by Foxboy - 09-21-2011, 08:35 PM

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