Hark! Are those the first harbingers of Chapter Three I spy on the horizon?
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Hark! Are those the first harbingers of Chapter Three I spy on the horizon?
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 Quote:Okay, how's this rewrite of the passage in question sound?I should've said this earlier, but the rewrite looks fine to me, at least. You provided richer detail than my simple, "people have, historically, acquired some weird names." This is good. And the college roomie named "Terror" is an amusing continuity joke, Herr Schroeck. ----- Big Brother is watching you. And damn, you are so bloody BORING. |
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Hark! Are those the first harbingers of Chapter Three I spy on the horizon? - by Bob Schroeck - 02-01-2013, 08:36 PM
[No subject] - by Jorlem - 02-01-2013, 09:57 PM
[No subject] - by Proginoskes - 02-02-2013, 01:11 AM
[No subject] - by robkelk - 02-02-2013, 01:55 AM
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[No subject] - by DHBirr - 02-02-2013, 04:03 AM
[No subject] - by robkelk - 02-02-2013, 07:31 PM
[No subject] - by Norgarth - 02-02-2013, 09:39 PM
[No subject] - by robkelk - 02-02-2013, 10:17 PM
[No subject] - by Norgarth - 02-03-2013, 03:14 AM
[No subject] - by robkelk - 02-03-2013, 05:12 AM
[No subject] - by Bob Schroeck - 02-03-2013, 11:12 PM
I'm gladdened - by murmur - 02-11-2013, 02:03 AM
[No subject] - by Proginoskes - 02-11-2013, 03:24 AM
[No subject] - by Hazard - 02-11-2013, 05:05 AM
[No subject] - by Terrace - 02-11-2013, 06:02 AM
[No subject] - by DHBirr - 02-11-2013, 07:42 AM
[No subject] - by robkelk - 02-11-2013, 04:33 PM
[No subject] - by Bob Schroeck - 02-11-2013, 08:58 PM
[No subject] - by Shepherd - 02-11-2013, 09:30 PM
[No subject] - by ECSNorway - 02-12-2013, 06:34 AM
[No subject] - by Star Ranger4 - 02-12-2013, 05:26 PM
[No subject] - by Bob Schroeck - 02-12-2013, 08:48 PM
[No subject] - by Black Aeronaut - 02-19-2013, 08:24 AM
[No subject] - by Bob Schroeck - 02-19-2013, 04:51 PM
[No subject] - by robkelk - 03-24-2013, 03:20 AM
[No subject] - by DHBirr - 03-24-2013, 03:38 AM
[No subject] - by Bob Schroeck - 03-25-2013, 02:55 PM
[No subject] - by Seraviel - 03-25-2013, 03:39 PM
[No subject] - by Star Ranger4 - 03-25-2013, 06:16 PM
[No subject] - by Bob Schroeck - 03-25-2013, 06:52 PM
[No subject] - by Ebony - 03-25-2013, 09:00 PM
[No subject] - by Bob Schroeck - 03-25-2013, 10:43 PM
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[No subject] - by Bob Schroeck - 03-25-2013, 11:59 PM
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[No subject] - by Bob Schroeck - 03-27-2013, 10:46 PM
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