I don't really see why. It looks like you predicted basically what was going to happen quite well. '.'
I'm still liking a lot of the story but the massage thing... Well, I was fine with the "Marry me!" thing as a running joke, when it's with
*non-enemies*. When it starts sounding more like brainwashing, that's disturbing. In fact, it's really disturbing.
Sakura getting wet from watching it is also really disturbing. Particularly since (as a review reminded me), the characters are their canon ages in this story.
(Though the reviewer wasn't responding to this chapter. Actually, I'm not entirely certain what the reviewer was talking about. '.' ) Still, that
part's relatively minor.
Though, another reviewers suggestion that if Naruto developed similar technqiques that worked on men, he'd put Ibiki out of business. That's amusing.
I'm a bit uncertain about this bloodline transfer thing. On the one hand, giving the Byakugan to anyone is likely to annoy Hiashi, which I have no trouble
supporting. Having it persist across resets would probably allow him to be annoyed in a large variety of additional ways, so that's good. On the other
hand, while I can see the Kyuubi being helpful in certain ways if only to be more entertained, that seems like it might be pushing it a bit. On the unexplained
third hand, it'd probably annoy Neji too. '.'
That part at the end of Ino and Sakura's fight is kind of dubious too. Given that Sakura has no way of knowing the actual meaning of what Ino is
"offering" her (or that she's in fact *being* offered something, rather than simply threatened with humiliation), there's no way she could
have made a real decision about it, and having made the offer is a meaningless act.
Oh, and if it's a choice between giving everyone a free show, and imminent decapitation? I'd give everyone the free show, thank you. Still, in some
ways this actually seems less anti-Sakura than some earlier parts.
-Morgan, "DECORATE ME!!" ^o^
"Do it for honor. Do it for glory. Do it for the lulz."
I'm still liking a lot of the story but the massage thing... Well, I was fine with the "Marry me!" thing as a running joke, when it's with
*non-enemies*. When it starts sounding more like brainwashing, that's disturbing. In fact, it's really disturbing.
Sakura getting wet from watching it is also really disturbing. Particularly since (as a review reminded me), the characters are their canon ages in this story.
(Though the reviewer wasn't responding to this chapter. Actually, I'm not entirely certain what the reviewer was talking about. '.' ) Still, that
part's relatively minor.
Though, another reviewers suggestion that if Naruto developed similar technqiques that worked on men, he'd put Ibiki out of business. That's amusing.
I'm a bit uncertain about this bloodline transfer thing. On the one hand, giving the Byakugan to anyone is likely to annoy Hiashi, which I have no trouble
supporting. Having it persist across resets would probably allow him to be annoyed in a large variety of additional ways, so that's good. On the other
hand, while I can see the Kyuubi being helpful in certain ways if only to be more entertained, that seems like it might be pushing it a bit. On the unexplained
third hand, it'd probably annoy Neji too. '.'
That part at the end of Ino and Sakura's fight is kind of dubious too. Given that Sakura has no way of knowing the actual meaning of what Ino is
"offering" her (or that she's in fact *being* offered something, rather than simply threatened with humiliation), there's no way she could
have made a real decision about it, and having made the offer is a meaningless act.
Oh, and if it's a choice between giving everyone a free show, and imminent decapitation? I'd give everyone the free show, thank you. Still, in some
ways this actually seems less anti-Sakura than some earlier parts.
-Morgan, "DECORATE ME!!" ^o^
"Do it for honor. Do it for glory. Do it for the lulz."