thank you, I was afraid that some of my coments would be taken too harshly, but I am glad to see this improvement.
After reading it over a few times the only cluky thing I could find was "a massive barn of a stone fortress" which doesn't parse well.
E: "Did they... did they just endorse the combination of the JSDF and US Army by showing them as two lesbian lolicons moving in together and holding hands and talking about how 'intimate' they were?"
B: "Have you forgotten so soon? They're phasing out Don't Ask, Don't Tell."
After reading it over a few times the only cluky thing I could find was "a massive barn of a stone fortress" which doesn't parse well.
E: "Did they... did they just endorse the combination of the JSDF and US Army by showing them as two lesbian lolicons moving in together and holding hands and talking about how 'intimate' they were?"
B: "Have you forgotten so soon? They're phasing out Don't Ask, Don't Tell."