Please forward this to fosfor as well:
This is fantastic. I enjoyed this so much. It just felt so nice, so straight. It's full of a sort of boundless joy and enthusiasm for the subject matter. That's actually very rare. It also reminds me of the first part of Bleach, before it became the almost obnoxiously shounen fight-fest it would be by the end of the Soul Society arc. That is a good thing, a VERY good thing.
The characters all come across well. Very well. You two really capture the voice of characters, keeping them disinct and interesting. Its fun to see them banter.
One major criticism: I'm totally unfamiliar with the Clamp series in question, so I can't much comment. However... its very poorly introduced. It's the greatest flaw in the series. You seem to skim past a proper introduction for the crossover elements while expecting me to pick up things by inference. It just fell flat to me, because I had no idea what these things were about. Also, how Hokuto became part of the group without... any sort of introduction. She shows up, faints and then a few months (years?) later she's palling around with Tatsuki? I'm sorry, I must have missed the part where they interacted before that point enough to make me care.
Overall, good work.
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Epsilon
This is fantastic. I enjoyed this so much. It just felt so nice, so straight. It's full of a sort of boundless joy and enthusiasm for the subject matter. That's actually very rare. It also reminds me of the first part of Bleach, before it became the almost obnoxiously shounen fight-fest it would be by the end of the Soul Society arc. That is a good thing, a VERY good thing.
The characters all come across well. Very well. You two really capture the voice of characters, keeping them disinct and interesting. Its fun to see them banter.
One major criticism: I'm totally unfamiliar with the Clamp series in question, so I can't much comment. However... its very poorly introduced. It's the greatest flaw in the series. You seem to skim past a proper introduction for the crossover elements while expecting me to pick up things by inference. It just fell flat to me, because I had no idea what these things were about. Also, how Hokuto became part of the group without... any sort of introduction. She shows up, faints and then a few months (years?) later she's palling around with Tatsuki? I'm sorry, I must have missed the part where they interacted before that point enough to make me care.
Overall, good work.
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Epsilon