Oh, my, oh, my, I had forgotten all about this.
I am so glad to see more!
(After reading)
Nice. Very nice. I definitely want to see more -- you've taken the jokey spamfic and turned it into a hell of a story beginning.
The only quibble I have at the moment is the line "being 'niichan's 'neesan". "'nii" means exclusively "older brother", to the best of my knowledge. You want to use "ototo", which IIRC is "little brother".
-- Bob
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The Internet Is For Norns.
I am so glad to see more!
(After reading)
Nice. Very nice. I definitely want to see more -- you've taken the jokey spamfic and turned it into a hell of a story beginning.
The only quibble I have at the moment is the line "being 'niichan's 'neesan". "'nii" means exclusively "older brother", to the best of my knowledge. You want to use "ototo", which IIRC is "little brother".
-- Bob
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The Internet Is For Norns.