Actually I think it's very good.
It does remind me a little of "The case of the Toxic Spell Dump" over at Baen - but only in the way there's technomancy involved...and ye olde grumpy inspectors![[Image: smile.gif]](http://www.ezboard.com/intl/aenglish/images/emoticons/smile.gif)
I think what I like best is that it reads like a new Manga... but isn't. And isn't recycling plot ideas from other Manga.
...Worst thing about Manga/anime is that really they're all very alike in setting and character. Your story is managing to be very Manga without being a rehash of... 'super techno-magic people with angst ridden issues fight each other and bad guys a lot with random sexual innuendo for variety' ...
...well, so far anyway
Raphael
It does remind me a little of "The case of the Toxic Spell Dump" over at Baen - but only in the way there's technomancy involved...and ye olde grumpy inspectors
I think what I like best is that it reads like a new Manga... but isn't. And isn't recycling plot ideas from other Manga.
...Worst thing about Manga/anime is that really they're all very alike in setting and character. Your story is managing to be very Manga without being a rehash of... 'super techno-magic people with angst ridden issues fight each other and bad guys a lot with random sexual innuendo for variety' ...
...well, so far anyway
Raphael