It's good to see Hethia has a sense of humor, but you might want to make the narrator comment on that twinkle in her eye or that small smile or whatever she always gets when she is teasing. Or if you wanted this as an example that she's not human put a comment like that in the narrators thoughts, because it can be read either way.
And why did he switch from Heart Spirit to Hethia? It was just before the second Covenant, wasn't it? Are we supposed to know why?
Anyway good work.
E: "Did they... did they just endorse the combination of the JSDF and US Army by showing them as two lesbian lolicons moving in together and holding hands and talking about how 'intimate' they were?"
B: "Have you forgotten so soon? They're phasing out Don't Ask, Don't Tell."
And why did he switch from Heart Spirit to Hethia? It was just before the second Covenant, wasn't it? Are we supposed to know why?
Anyway good work.
E: "Did they... did they just endorse the combination of the JSDF and US Army by showing them as two lesbian lolicons moving in together and holding hands and talking about how 'intimate' they were?"
B: "Have you forgotten so soon? They're phasing out Don't Ask, Don't Tell."