Well, this seemed so obvious to me that I figured I was either mistaken or it's a red herring, but it looks like you're creating a triangle here: him, the magical girl, and Kiura. That whole business with Kiura manifesting a body to curl up sleeping -- she's apparently heard somewhere that pretty girls look even cuter curled up sleeping -- and stretching, even though he thinks, "But spirits don't need to...." And the reference to the way she looks up at him while applying her lips to the cut on his hand. It really looks to me like she's putting moves on him. But you said a "subtle" development, and this notion kind of jumped out and waved at me, so maybe I'm all wet on this....
I have no idea what "Domitor" means, so I can't guess what the significance of that is.
Now considering he's promised to eventually go with the magical girl to her world if there's nothing keeping him in his own (I know I'm oversimplifying), I wonder, if I'm right about Kiura's motivations: 1) Is she willing to share? and 2) Is she able to leave this world?
I liked the way he was unnerved by Kiura's uncharacteristic kittenish behavior. And thinking about it, he seemed shaken by the magical girl's affectionate ways, too. Has he maybe been living like a celibate? Married to the job? Hasn't had enough contact with women who seem attracted to him? What happens if some of her paranoia rubs off on him and he starts to wonder if she's setting him up for something?
If you were actually talking about something else when you said a "subtle ... character development," then I apologize for wasting your time and I have no idea how to help.
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Big Brother is watching you. And damn, you are so bloody BORING.
I have no idea what "Domitor" means, so I can't guess what the significance of that is.
Now considering he's promised to eventually go with the magical girl to her world if there's nothing keeping him in his own (I know I'm oversimplifying), I wonder, if I'm right about Kiura's motivations: 1) Is she willing to share? and 2) Is she able to leave this world?
I liked the way he was unnerved by Kiura's uncharacteristic kittenish behavior. And thinking about it, he seemed shaken by the magical girl's affectionate ways, too. Has he maybe been living like a celibate? Married to the job? Hasn't had enough contact with women who seem attracted to him? What happens if some of her paranoia rubs off on him and he starts to wonder if she's setting him up for something?
If you were actually talking about something else when you said a "subtle ... character development," then I apologize for wasting your time and I have no idea how to help.
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Big Brother is watching you. And damn, you are so bloody BORING.