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Dead Bang - Dragonflight - 03-17-2004
I've got an updated file at the same site now. About 72K RTF.
www.cyberus.ca/~dragonflight/dead_bang/
Now to figure out how to register my name. Maybe I can use a modification. I've done that before...
Re: Dead Bang - Bob Schroeck - 03-17-2004
Do you mean as a user here? I believe you can register as a local user for this board only and not worry about collisions with other ezBoard members.
Of course, it's been so long since I've seen a registration prompt, I don't know where they are.
In the mean time, I must trot over to your website and get the latest version of DB1...
-- Bob
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There's no wrong way to eat a Rhesus.
Re: Dead Bang - offsides - 03-18-2004
A request (before I go off and read the update): post your stories in plain text format and not RTF? From the first incarnation, you don't need any of the formatting the RTF gives you, and text is much more portable (and smaller
)Go ahead and work on it in RTF (or whatever) as your master, just post as plain text - your readers will thank you.
Thanks (see!
)Offsides
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Re: Dead Bang - Jeanne Hedge - 03-18-2004
Interesting start
A couple comments -
Sylia "teaching" Lisa - Light the candle, put it out, light it again... very reminiscent of a scene in the first book of the series DW1 was based on, teaching a firestarter to start controlled fires, put them out, start them again.....
During the movie theater scene (Oct 12 2037) it's said that Nene is just shy of 25 years old. Nene's birthyear is 2014, if you go by the date shown in that old BGC video game her birthday is August 31. So she's actually about 6 weeks past her 23rd birthday at that point. Not that it probably matters any.
Sylia asking Linna to take over Loon - I'm a bit surprised she didn't give Linna's past history with the Changs as one of the advantages to her running things there.
btw -- I think you had Linna leave Raven's Garage wearing a jacket over a robe over her testing gear. You didn't have her change out of her workout gear anywhere along the line.
Typo when Madigan's secretary fills her in on the overnight news: "I cant very well have our international offices gong rogue on me now, can I?"
"Also, on a related note, Miss Reika Chang, the rock star known as Vision has flown into Megatokyo." -- I think there should be a comma after Vision.
Girls in the sewers, eh? Certainly more problematical than alligators.
Jeanne
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Typos and corrections - Dragonflight - 03-18-2004
"...gong rogue"
Oops...
I considered it, but the inference between the lines is that Linna already knew, since Reika had had a letter from Linna before the story started to the effect that the Chang Group was in a partnership with Loon. That was what brought Reika to Megatokyo, in fact, and was broadly hinted at in the prologue.
Still, I thought there would be little need for Sylia to bring that up. The opportunity to make more money in the business world should be all the lure Linna would need to jump at the chance. She's been demonstrated as a dance instructor who's keenly interested in the business executive model. I don't know. Maybe it's the dressier attire, or the intimation of power over others. Maybe it pays better. She's also money-hungry. (Maybe it's just a better way to meet guys? She goes through them fast enough.)
Anyway, thanks for the info. I'll make the changes today...
Plain text format - Dragonflight - 03-18-2004
One of the things that's really hard to do in plain text is italics.
That's the big reason why I resort to RTF. It makes it really easy to put exclamations into the storyline without lots of distracting text. I'll do a text conversion however, if you like, and leave it up to the reader to decide which one they want.
Re: Plain text format - Jeanne Hedge - 03-18-2004
Quote:There are a couple oft-used conventions in place of italics for text files: _underscores_ or *asterisks*.
One of the things that's really hard to do in plain text is italics.
When it comes time to do a fully formatted version, then you do a find and manual replace.Jeanne
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-- Gabrielle of Potadeia
Re: Typos and corrections - Jeanne Hedge - 03-18-2004
Quote:
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Birthdays - Dragonflight - 03-18-2004
Now that I know when it is, absolutely!
Having biographical data is really helpful for stuff like that. As for writing in her birthday party, absolutely I will!
Now I just have to figure out if anything particularly *nasty* happens (there's me practicing with asterisks. )Anyway, previously you mentioned how Lisa's training looked similar to Griffon's from the Valdemar series. Having read (or own) most of the series, that's not surprising. I'm re-reading the "Winds" trilogy to get a feel for the different levels of magic ability. They're pretty nebulous when you get down to it. More about self-maintaining spells, channelling and power levels the more powerful you get.
Bob mentioned that Lisa has to be a well-trained and competent Adept by the time she jumps into his timeline, and doing that became a heck of a lot easier when I read something he wrote way back in the first couple of chapters. Back when Doug first sampled the Megatokyo Node.
Re: Birthdays - Bob Schroeck - 03-18-2004
Bwah? What would that be?
-- Bob
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There's no wrong way to eat a Rhesus.
Re: Dead Bang - Bob Schroeck - 03-18-2004
Quote:It's also reminiscent (intentionally, from what Dragonflight said elsewhere) of Skeeve's early training in Asprin's "Myth Adventures" series.
Sylia "teaching" Lisa - Light the candle, put it out, light it again... very reminiscent of a scene in the first book of the series DW1 was based on, teaching a firestarter to start controlled fires, put them out, start them again.....
-- Bob
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There's no wrong way to eat a Rhesus.
Re: Plain text format - Bob Schroeck - 03-18-2004
Quote:Some rendering engines -- such as that used for plain text email in Mozilla -- even recognize them and alter the text
There are a couple oft-used conventions in place of italics for text files: _underscores_ or *asterisks*.
accordingly.
-- Bob
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There's no wrong way to eat a Rhesus.
Re: Birthdays - Star Ranger4 - 03-19-2004
Bob Bwah'd:
Quote:Chapter 1 or 2... where Doug realizes about just how darn BIG the node is, and that no one has been tapping it... then theorises "With a node that big, anyone who tried would have all sorts of control problems because of the power overload" or words to that effect."I was an Otaku before those kids came along and changed the meaning of the word."
What would that be?
-- HM "Howling Mad" Wilson to more than one team-mate.
Hear that thunder rolling till it seems to split the sky?
That's every ship in Grayson's Navy taking up the cry-
NO QUARTER!!!
-- "No Quarter", by Echo's Children
Re: Birthdays - Jeanne Hedge - 03-19-2004
Quote:What are you bwah-ing, Bob?Jeanne
Bwah? What would that be?
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Re: Birthdays - Bob Schroeck - 03-19-2004
Quote:Oh! Um, well... that bit was left over from when the fic was originally set in the BGC universe that Twister and Legion had already dumped in the Mixmaster. The overload caused by the monster node was going to be the reason Twister's female form's magic was all screwed up...
Chapter 1 or 2... where Doug realizes about just how darn BIG the node is, and that no one has been tapping it... then theorises "With a node that big, anyone who tried would have all sorts of control problems because of the power overload" or words to that effect.
(Edit: fixed markup)
-- Bob
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There's no wrong way to eat a Rhesus.
Re: Birthdays - cpt kangarooski - 03-19-2004
The significance with regards to the birthdays is that they fall on the same days of the year as the birthdays of the seiyuu that played them. (n.b. the date given for Priss is that of her first seiyuu; the alternative is Nov. 17)
--Cpt K (whose mother, and twin brother and sister share the same birthday which means I can forget to get them anything much more efficiently)
Nodes and overloads - Dragonflight - 03-19-2004
Well, for better or for worse, it's written.
Besides, this works out well. She'll be either high-end Adept, or maybe even a coveted Sorceress-Adept by the time she's finished, simply by virtue of the fact that when she graduates to Adept level magic, *nothing will work right*. The entire section on Adept level magic won't gel with the results she's getting (Once she starts tapping the node). So she'll have to essentially reinvent what she needs to know, and develop the kind of control only a Healing Adept would have to have. By the time she's finished, she'll be a powerhouse of the first order. Now, there's just scripting that all in.
Re: Nodes and overloads - Bob Schroeck - 03-19-2004
Okay, that works for me.
And that's probably before she even thinks to try Theurgy...
-- Bob
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There's no wrong way to eat a Rhesus.
Re: Nodes and overloads - classicdrogn - 03-20-2004
You know, I just had an odd vision of this - take the one Lina has when Amelia is first pestering her about teracher her the Dragon Slave, then substitute Scoop Chase age Lisa, who says, "How dare you destroy an innocent girl's camera, you evil mercenaries!? DRAGON SLAVE!!"
I know, by this time she's quite a bit more mature than that... well, she has a more durable camera, anyway... but still.
- CD
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woot Med. Eng., verb, 1st & 3rd pers. prsnt. sg. know, knows
Nodes and overloads - Foxboy - 03-20-2004
Theurgy- n. The working of miracles.
"Do you think they'll make it?"
"It'll take a miracle."
''We don't just borrow words; on occasion, English has pursued other languages down alleyways to beat
them unconscious and rifle their pockets for new vocabulary.''
-- James Nicoll
Re: Birthdays - Jeanne Hedge - 03-20-2004
Quote:Pin-Pon! Cpt K wins the no-prize!
The significance with regards to the birthdays
Quote:We've got a spate of that, and near-misses, in our family too. My mother and I, my cousin and our grandfather, two more cousins (sisters) on consecutive days, among others. If you remember, you make a lot of people happy, if you forget they're all mad at you!Jeanne
whose mother, and twin brother and sister share the same birthday
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Re: Birthdays - Jeanne Hedge - 03-20-2004
Quote:Aw, give the girl a break. Even Knight Sabers can have perfectly normal and uneventful days
As for writing in her birthday party, absolutely I will!
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Re: Birthdays - Star Ranger4 - 03-21-2004
Sure they do, Jeanne. Its just that those don't make for good stories. =p"I was an Otaku before those kids came along and changed the meaning of the word."
-- HM "Howling Mad" Wilson to more than one team-mate.
Hear that thunder rolling till it seems to split the sky?
That's every ship in Grayson's Navy taking up the cry-
NO QUARTER!!!
-- "No Quarter", by Echo's Children
Uneventful Days - Jeanne Hedge - 03-21-2004
Quote:We're talking about a simple birthday party. Unless I greatly misunderstood, a scene, not a story. For heaven's sake, even Bert VV managed to give the KS birthday parties where the excitement derived from food, drink and gifts, not behemoth blue B-series boomers blunderingly bombing and blasting away.
those don't make for good stories
A little contrast is good for a story that's more than a few scenes long.Jeanne
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Birthday blues - Dragonflight - 03-22-2004
Oh, I agree. However, Linna's birthday's going to be a bittersweet event, since although Reika's there, she's a little wrecked at the moment. And no matter how hard she tries to have a good time, the tragedy her family's endured will come back to haunt her. She'll see Irene ghosting in the background in her imagination, her recent loss pulling her down, and the fact that since Linna's now running the organization her own family wants to destroy, this could be her *last* birthday... Reika's going to be a basket case for a while, I'm afraid.