Very sw33t, especially the backstory you're building for Kabuto ... *snicker* *chuckle* *chortle* sorry, but whenever I read about the guy, I've got this mental image of a big green horned thing several stories high, I think it's hardwired into me.
Ahem, anyways, references to oversized aliens aside, the Hinata-Neji interaction was interesting, though yeah, the fight was kinda short ... no idea on how to help with that, though - I do drag-on-brawls, not martial arts duels ... though you might try to put in something about how Neji's feeling during the fight. More specifically, a few sentences about being caught off-guard by how much Hinata had improved would be appreciate. It'd make the fight a bit longer.
OTOH, short fight, minimal number of blows traded for maximum effect ... isn't that what a fight between two nins _should_ look like (at least, if Naruto, as a show, wasn't so centered around the fights).
Ahem ... more!
-Griever
When tact is required, use brute force. When force is required, use greater force.
When the greatest force is required, use your head. Surprise is everything. - The Book of Cataclysm
Ahem, anyways, references to oversized aliens aside, the Hinata-Neji interaction was interesting, though yeah, the fight was kinda short ... no idea on how to help with that, though - I do drag-on-brawls, not martial arts duels ... though you might try to put in something about how Neji's feeling during the fight. More specifically, a few sentences about being caught off-guard by how much Hinata had improved would be appreciate. It'd make the fight a bit longer.
OTOH, short fight, minimal number of blows traded for maximum effect ... isn't that what a fight between two nins _should_ look like (at least, if Naruto, as a show, wasn't so centered around the fights).
Ahem ... more!
-Griever
When tact is required, use brute force. When force is required, use greater force.
When the greatest force is required, use your head. Surprise is everything. - The Book of Cataclysm