TGNH - Chapter 2

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That looks like a good bit to me, but perhaps I don't understand the quetion. Is it that you need a transition scene to fit in between, to contrast spooky-horrific base exploration and finding Haku and semi-tense/serious not-quite-downtime? If so - try a bit of playing or even slapstick, maybe as the kids are training. They are still kids, after all, even iof they are also trained to fight and possibly kill. It doesn't ahve to be anything major, maybe they get into a rock skipping contest, or Naruto turns into a giant squirrel with Henge and throws acorns at Sasuke when thy're tree climbing. Heck, teach them water walking early and have an amourous squid join the Sasuke fan club
- CD
What, you think Samuel L. Jackson isn't going to survive the zombie apocalypse?

SERVO: Loook *deeeeply* into my eyes... Tell me, what do you see?
CROW: (hypnotized) A twisted man who wants to inflict his pain upon others.
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"Anko, what you do in your free time is your own choice. Use it wisely. And if you do not use it wisely, make sure you thoroughly enjoy whatever unwise thing you are doing." - HymnOfRagnorok as Orochimaru at SpaceBattles
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