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Teaser from Chapter Three
RE: Teaser from Chapter Three
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I read the reference to the shrine's "fierce, armored" guardian spirit, and my eye also caught mention of the Rabbit, and sudden free-association brought an inappropriate (no, not the dirty way) thought to my mind:  Usagi Yojimbo.  I mention it only because someone other than I might be twisted enough to find the fact amusing.

Minor grammar quibble:  "It took her hand in its open one, and placing whatever it'd found in its pocket into it."  I think you need to either scrap the "and" or make "placing" into "placed" in this sentence.

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Teaser from Chapter Three - by Bob Schroeck - 03-19-2019, 08:01 AM
RE: Teaser from Chapter Three - by classicdrogn - 03-19-2019, 08:25 AM
RE: Teaser from Chapter Three - by DHBirr - 03-19-2019, 10:04 AM
RE: Teaser from Chapter Three - by Bob Schroeck - 03-19-2019, 12:12 PM
RE: Teaser from Chapter Three - by Star Ranger4 - 03-19-2019, 06:51 PM
RE: Teaser from Chapter Three - by Labster - 03-20-2019, 01:18 AM
RE: Teaser from Chapter Three - by robkelk - 03-20-2019, 08:15 AM
RE: Teaser from Chapter Three - by classicdrogn - 03-20-2019, 08:59 AM
RE: Teaser from Chapter Three - by Bob Schroeck - 03-20-2019, 11:25 AM
RE: Teaser from Chapter Three - by Star Ranger4 - 03-20-2019, 09:32 PM
RE: Teaser from Chapter Three - by SilverFang01 - 03-21-2019, 07:30 AM
RE: Teaser from Chapter Three - by Norgarth - 03-21-2019, 10:48 AM
RE: Teaser from Chapter Three - by robkelk - 03-21-2019, 05:36 PM

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