There's still a dropped word or things a spellchecker would approve but make no sense here and there by the end, but it is better. Honestly the storytelling was good enough that I just sent my inner line editor out for donuts and cocoa, then when it was done switched to other fandoms for a few days because I couldn't stand the way(s) Sakura usually gets portrayed straight after seeing her as a well rounded, effective character who does more than simper and fawn,freeze and cry or screech and dish out abuse.
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"Anko, what you do in your free time is your own choice. Use it wisely. And if you do not use it wisely, make sure you thoroughly enjoy whatever unwise thing you are doing." - HymnOfRagnorok as Orochimaru at SpaceBattles
woot Med. Eng., verb, 1st & 3rd pers. prsnt. sg. know, knows
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"Anko, what you do in your free time is your own choice. Use it wisely. And if you do not use it wisely, make sure you thoroughly enjoy whatever unwise thing you are doing." - HymnOfRagnorok as Orochimaru at SpaceBattles
woot Med. Eng., verb, 1st & 3rd pers. prsnt. sg. know, knows