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[GDocs] Opening submission [Life of Drez]
RE: [GDocs] Opening submission
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(11-18-2023, 04:44 PM)Norgarth Wrote: hiya and welcome aboard.

reading thru Up there and I spotted a couple of  typos.  

As Drez and Rei are first testing the engines you have:
Quote: As Drez nodded, he yelped as he grabbed the arm rest with his right hand and snagged on something, drawing blood from the side of his hand. As he wrapped the rag around the cut and started hunting the first aid kit, Rei looked with concern. “Just caught something on the seat, I’ll check it once I get this wrapped up.” After cleaning the wound and bandaging it, which wasn’t as bad as he first suspected, Drez leaned down to get a look under the arm rest, only to find something there that could have cut him, let alone any evidence of blood.
I'm pretty sure that should be 'nothing'

Quote:The ship slowly rose, in defiance of all known laws of gravity. The wave was like that though, physical laws because more of a suggestion where it was involved. As he gave it some throttle, the RV started to accelerate slowly, sounding like nothing more than an RV climbing a steep grade.
should be 'became'

they're the most annoying kind of typos, the ones that are actual (but wrong) words and don't get spotted by spell check Tongue 

overall, enjoyable reads. Smile


Thank you. I'll get those fixed. Like they say, easiest way to find a typo is to publish it, then glance causally at it a week later...

Drezzer
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RE: [GDocs] Opening submission - by Bob Schroeck - 11-17-2023, 11:29 PM
RE: [GDocs] Opening submission - by Drezzer - 11-18-2023, 07:14 AM
RE: [GDocs] Opening submission - by Dartz - 11-18-2023, 07:54 AM
RE: [GDocs] Opening submission - by Drezzer - 11-18-2023, 09:08 AM
RE: [GDocs] Opening submission - by Norgarth - 11-18-2023, 04:44 PM
RE: [GDocs] Opening submission - by Drezzer - 11-18-2023, 04:48 PM

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